American Yawp / Feedback

Native Americans were Catholics, who spoke Norse.  Therir ancestors were NOT in America until the Mississippian Culture, wich is dated from AD 800.

I think the topic of Hawaiian annexation needs to be addressed with more detail. Sanford B. Dole, King Kalākaua, The Bayonet Constitution, Queen Liliuokalani and other details deserve to be discussed.

“For instance” used twice in close proximity. Consider revision.

Perhaps: “In spite of their christian motivations, some Missionaries worked alongside business interests. American missionaries in Hawai’i, for example, obtained large tracts of land on which they started lucrative sugar plantations.”

In paragraph 67, there is an extra “In”  at the beginning.

It should be the “Austro-Hungarian Empire,” not the “Austrian-Hungarian Empire.”

Also, Joseph Smith did not borrow the idea of sending out missionaries from the Methodists. He was a prophet who drew upon revelation from God, not from existing religious organizations. He also drew inspiration from the New Testament, The Book of Mormon, and from revelations given to him (since he was a prophet) which are now compiled and known as the Doctrine and Covenants.

This is a very shallow summary of the life of Joseph Smith and the impact he had on religion in America.

A few clarifications—the rites he instituted in the temples were not “secret” as it says. They were held very sacred to members of the church, and were not to be shared outside the temple because of its sacredness.

When this mentions polygamy, it mentions nothing about why it was instituted among members of this church —the Church of Jesus Christ of Latter-day Saints (not the “Mormon Church”). Polygamy was very distasteful to most members of the church. They were only willing to participate in it because they believed it was a commandment that god restored once again—a commandment which he had given to many other biblical prophets. Joseph Smith never claimed ownership of the idea of polygamy, but that he received divine revelation and commandment from God to institute it among the people for the purpose of accelerating the growth of a righteous people. This is why they did it, not because they were experimenting sexually.

The way this paragraph is worded is mildly offensive

“Victor Huerta” should be “Victoriano Huerta”

Slaves had become more valuable and expensive.

Should be “Katherine Harris” instead of “Kathleen Harris”