American Yawp / Feedback

I thought that ‘familial responsibilities were a great addition to the romantic vision of life they discussed We associate selfishness and greed with the westward expansion, and there were some terrible things that occurred like the driving out of the native Americans. Yet, this gives us insight and empathy into those moving west for a greater life.

Seizing the native Americans land was very wrong. President Jackson and the government forced them out.

The purpose of manifest destiny was to move people out west. It was needed to further America.

Dude, not the right place. But I do too.

Is no one going to address this? What’s the point of it being a collaborative text then?

I believe the word “after” should be added to the sentence about Willie Horton (after being released).

Charles, this a history book. We don’t need you personal political opinion here. This comment section is not for that. Unless you have an actual suggestion to edit the text, please shut up.

This sentence is confusing and hard to read. The quotations make it difficult to decipher how the beginning and end of the sentence connect. A simple fix would be to remove the “as” in the phrase “as U.S. officials…” and insert a when at the beginning of the phrase “fighting erupted in Korea.”

If you are going to include a document by Goldwater (which I think you should), you need to mention the 1964 election in the text.

I know there is a passing mention in the previous chapter–but students aren’t going to find it.

You probably also need to describe Wallace’s victories in 1964 and 1968.

What about a document from Young Americans for Freedom?

This paragraph ends with a close quote which is not matched by an open quote, or part of a quotation. I recommend deleting the close quote.